my cowboy hamlet. I'm not saying it's a better poem.
in fact the fact that it's bad is kind of the point.
And it works better in context but here it is anyway.
Fratricide: A Poem For a Bear to Read
In the grimy streets of
Where the flowers don't grow
A man goes out to buy a horse
But comes home with
A gun instead
Polished as it is
A Bear is just a large person who feels too much
Hope in my heart
Flowers at the funeral
No flowers at the saloon
A bear will hibernate in winter
But our feelings